Updates on 1E2 Book of Legends: The CLIMAX!

Hi 1E2ians ;)

Anyway here are some updates on your introductions to your Personal Legend.

So far, everyone seem to be doing alright. There are, however, some problems with the tenses still and grammatical proper sentences. But no worries, I have added personal comments to your works to help you improve on them. So make the necessary changes alright?

The marks given will show on how well your works are. If you received 5/10 and above, it means that you have fulfilled the basic criteria of introducing the 1) Who is the main character? 2) When & Where did your legend take place? 3) Introducing "Evil" Character. Half of the 10 marks are focused on the creativity behind your introduction.

Each of the segment i.e Introduction, Climax and Ending will be 10 marks each. So take note of that when you write the subsequent comments.

Here are some of the your works which I found incredibly interesting :)

These are their original works and do not contain my personal comments. As you can see, there are things that can be improved on i.e changing to simple past tense, shortening long sentences and even punctuations! So check out my personal comments on your work alright? It is only to make you write better ;)

Anyway, I shall not ramble on about your introduction. Let's concentrate on your climax today.

As promised, there will be another video - The legend of Bukit Merah!

• Identify the climax and think of your own.
• Is your climax as exciting?
• If not, how can you make it better?

Remember, you will have to write the BODY+CLIMAX today. If you can't quite remember what should be inside these segments:

BODY: What happened? Why did it happen?

Climax: Should not be more than 6 sentences. Use any of the 4 strategies that I taught you

1. HINTING Danger - you never know what's next!
2. Varied Sentence length - making use of long and short sentences together
3. AS-IF method - using the phrase "as if" to make comparisons i.e my heart raced as if it was squeezed by a giant
4. Using QUESTIONS - intriguing your readers to imagine!

Use the format below (This is Miss Teratai's story until the climax!) Replace your words over mine but make sure the headings of Introduction, Body and Climax is clearly written.

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Instruction: To email this copy to Miss Teratai at msteratai@gmail.com

By, 25^th July 2009, Saturday by 10.00a.m.

Name: Miss Teratai

Class:1E2

Date:23^rd July 2009

The Legend of the Crying Banana Tree

Introduction

When we think of banana trees, we often think of the many evil ghosts that linger around the bushes. Even you are now imagining the horrid image of a white cloth flying through the air…

But have you ever heard of the legend of the Crying Banana Tree? It is a story set in an earlier Singapore, 50 years ago to be exact, about a girl named Suraiya. She was the most beautiful and kind person. But in the end, she was cursed for eternity - to be imprisoned inside a banana tree by an evil sorcerer named Abu.

Body

Every morning, at the first light of dawn, Suraiya would always sit by this particular banana tree and sang her heart out. Her fiancé, Bahrin, was away at sea and her songs were always depictions of her love for him. She had a beautiful voice that could stop anyone in his tracks. And on one particular day, an evil sorcerer, Abu, came by and heard her singing melodiously.

He was besotted by her. Quickly, he asked for her hand in marriage from Pak Leman, her father and villagehead, but he was outrightly refused. Pak Leman did not think he was fit enough to be his son-in-law and rudely chased him out of village!

“Get out of this place, you fool!” bellowed Pak Leman.

Feeling humiliated by such treatment, Abu went out of the village as quietly as he could and everything went back to normal.

Climax

A week went by peacefully. Suraiya quietly walked over to her favourite spot beside a tree. RUSTLE RUSTLE! She heard the sounds of leaves being brushed aside and stones being thrown about. Her heart raced as if she was cut off air. What could that be? The sudden glint of a knife swept across her face. A black shadow!

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Remember to email me your INTRO+BODY+CLIMAX by this

Saturday, 25th July, 2009

at 10.00am.

I have all your personal particulars, don't make me call you up on the weekends!

I know you will do a great job!

Peaced Out,

Miss Teratai @ Zhenghua